Excerpt,  Work-In-Progress

WIPMarathon Check-In #7 (December/January)

Hey there, awesome people!

Last Word Count + Chapter Count:
7637 words, Chapter 3

Current WC + CC:
19841 words, Chapter 7

WIP Issues this week:
Rewriting this story is harder than I thought it would be. I added a character (kind of), not really by choice. It was drag him along or kill him for no reason. Two pages into Chapter 4, he was getting in my way. However, I try to trust myself, and if my subconscious told me to put him in the story, I figured, there had to be a reason, yes? I did find one. (And a really good one!) But then I worried it wouldn’t fit in with the story. And I was right. It doesn’t fit as the story is now, but that’s why I’m rewriting things, right? To make it better, and he definitely makes the story better. ^_^ (Or at least he will when I can get these chapters straight.)

What I learned this week in writing:
Actions stories are not fun if no one is getting their tail kicked. And kicked hard! I haven’t been wanting to beat my characters up of late, but after putting my MC through hell in my last project, I realized how wondrously beneficial it is. insert evil laugh here But really, it builds character. Makes them stronger. They’ll thank me when it’s over. There are a lot of fight scenes in this story. Lots of opportunities to maim some folks. ^_^

Also, things don’t have to be perfect right now. (My internal editor disagrees, but hey, I’m in charge, ya punk!) I will be going over this thing again, after all. For now I would really like to focus on getting this story straightened out because it is a right mess right now.

What distracted me this week while writing:
I’m still watching The Office. (Hey, there are 9 seasons, people!) I’m 100% sure I’ll be watching it for the rest of the month. But I have gotten a grip on myself. So yeah, this week? I’m introverted (surprise!) and I hate being busy. This was one of those weeks. I actually had a panic attack one day and finally just stepped away from another commitment before I imploded on myself. What do these things attract each other or something? I can go months without a week like this.

Last 200 words:
Okay so…I think this is towards the tail end of Chapter 6. (I say think because my brain is going about 5 different directions right now, and half the time I’m not even sure what I’m chapter I’m on because I keep going back and editing stuff.) I will get myself oriented this weekend now that I have nothing to do. happy sigh

He thinks for a moment, choosing his words carefully so he doesn’t set her off into another fit. He stares into the slow moving water. “Adria, what happens if Felix never comes around?” He feels her tense up beside him.

“What do you mean?” is her soft reply.

He swallows hard before continuing. He doesn’t want to put any ideas into her head. “He’ll grow old and die. Then what will you do?”

Staring at her reflection in the water, she reaches a hand down and traces the curve of her cheek in the surface, distorting the image of her face. “He’ll come around,” she says, her voice hard and determined.

“What if he doesn’t?”

She stands up and throws the deep blue marble into the stream. It sinks to the bottom as if it weighs ten times more than it should. “Go,” she says, keeping her eyes fixated on the marble that’s starting to mutate into something grotesque at the bottom of the stream.

Marathon Updates


  • Emma Adams

    Rewriting can be tricky! I’ve been having trouble with the inner editor this week as well, but it definitely doesn’t have to be perfect at this stage. 🙂

    Ha! We writers are cruel to our characters. I’m liking the amount of action scenes in the current WIP.

    I have the same reaction to busy weeks. It’s OK not to commit to everything! 🙂

  • Ifeoma Dennis

    I try to remind myself of that too since I tend to cringe at the thought of putting my characters through any kind of suffering.
    Good luck and hope you get your characters straight.
    I loved your excerpt, but worried it had two POVs in one scene. Hopefully, you’ll get that sorted out!

    • krystal jane

      Thanks. 🙂
      No, I’ve never been prone to head hopping. I probably should have included the next sentence, but I don’t like it so…yeah. There are two POVs in the story, and the character I added doesn’t have one. He does show up in both and I think that’s why I’m having a fit because adding him is a much bigger change to my plot than I anticipated. If the pay off didn’t look so good, I’d be horribly tempted to take the easy way out.

  • Brigid Gorry-Hines

    I also get some kind of evil enjoyment out of torturing my characters. In fact, I find that the more I love a character, the more cruel I am to him/her. Bwahaha! But you’re right, it’s also very important for character development (and it makes for more exciting reading). I’ve also been struggling a lot with my inner editor this week (granted, I always am…) so I understand how that is!

    Haha I also keep getting distracted by TV, but for me it’s been 30 Rock lately. I keep watching like 5 episodes a day instead of getting work done … oops. 😛 Ahh sorry about the panic attack––I also had one a few days ago and couldn’t get anything done all day as a result. Blehh.

    Loved your excerpt, and good luck with your writing this week!

  • catyorkc

    OOoo. Good excerpt. I saw image of the stream so clearly.

    Every revision makes you a better writer. I feel so strongly about that. Even when I make a decision that doesn’t work out, I still learn the reason why it didn’t and how I could change it. Keep sorting through it, and you’ll be glad when it falls into place. <3

  • Annrei Michelle Athy

    A mutating marble? That last line is killer.

    I’m working on my outline and reminding myself to, as my beta said, make things harder for my characters. As in, torture them a bit more, not in an action-y kind of way, but in an emo kind of way.

    • krystal jane

      Awesome. Thank you. ^_^
      You totally gotta torture them sometimes. Beat them up. Send some emotional havoc their way. It makes for a great read you know. 🙂 My character has a few emotional moments that I just love, love. I was reading something I wrote the other day and I cringed a little. I live for moments like that.

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